Feedback on my tone?

whoisj15

so ive been on and off this program. this is what I learned.


https://soundcloud.com/jeffoh2015/livin-on-a-prayer-sample


What do you guys think of my tone with pitch and rhythm aside?

Diego

...(I don't want this to sound negative, so don't take it the wrong way)
Okay. First off, It sounds almost as if you are reading the lyrics, and doing less singing.
You are 'singing' everything so fast you can hardly understand. Your voice sounds like it's not well supported.
This is a very tough song to sing.
I would say focus on getting the support solid.
And practice, practice, practice.

All the best,

-Diego.

whoisj15

thanks you

Diego

Where are you from may I ask?

whoisj15

I'm filipino

whoisj15

ok I know I rushed to post it, I learn it in the past few hours

whoisj15

i will try again later and listen to your advice

Diego

Also, try to put some time into learning how the song goes. Put some music in the background so we can identify what you're doing right and wrong as well (Your pitch).

whoisj15

thanks for the input i will improve on those things, at this moment i have no ability to continue with this song. i wil do another.

highmtn

Also you want to open up a little more to let the brightness come out. It sounds a little bit covered. You want brighter tone.

whoisj15

ok so i picked a different song


https://soundcloud.com/jeffoh2015/5sos-want-you-back

whoisj15

ok i wil brighten it more thanks

whoisj15

this is the brighter version. pitchy at the end

Diego

You're too far from the microphone or whatever you are using. Try once more.

whoisj15

hi I will upload soon

whoisj15

sorry just a minute wrong upload



ok this is the upload.


https://soundcloud.com/jeffoh2015/5sos-want-you-back-sample

whoisj15

ok so I added more tone. I'm awhere I need to fix my rhythm,diction and breathing.


but this is for tone purposes







UPDATE:

I'm trying to correct me rhythm and diction. hows the breathing?

https://soundcloud.com/jeffoh2015/5sos-speed-diction-coreection