Good job for a first try. You're not wasting any time.
OK, here it comes. This is the part where Bob suggests that more support will really help you with your vocal consistency. Your pitch is fairly accurate, but where it falls short, it sounds like you're just not supporting enough. Likewise, on your sustained notes, they kind of fall off a little shaky. That again, is fixed by more solid support. Finally tone. Not bad, but more support will bolster that with consistency as well.
Don't beat yourself up. I tell everybody this if I hear it in their voice, and I do almost all the time.
One other thing, for your future demos, see if you can get just a bit more of the backing tracks (music) on the recording for us to hear. It helps us to reference what pitches you should be hitting. Not much music, your voice should be predominant, as it is in this recording, but with the music just a little more audible.
This is a great start, and shows you've got the guts it takes to go for it, just a week after getting your KTVA package!
Keep doing those exercises to build your range and stamina, and work on your support.
Steven Kindig said:
Thx for you honest opinion. would rather have it straight out... this is what gives me more drive. and understanding. the biggest reason i asked a second time was i was really pressing down on my abs for support. quick question. as i go up in pitch i notice my uvula going up. but the walls down want to come in. i thought i saw that happen as ken went up in pitch