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heidianita
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As a Norwegian it's hard to find good words and sentences in English lyrics writing. I try to make good lyrics, but I am a afraid of trying to hard and make a fool out of my self. 
Can someone please have an opinion on a phrase for me? Does it work or is it just strange?
The phrase is : "armour on. Defend my wings of fragile. "
Is " wings of fragile" a meaningless phrase?
Can someone please have an opinion on a phrase for me? Does it work or is it just strange?
The phrase is : "armour on. Defend my wings of fragile. "
Is " wings of fragile" a meaningless phrase?
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I'm not sure if this will help, but in English, it may make more sense if you say: "Defend my fragile Wings"
Hope this helps!
"Fragile wings "won't fit the melody or the rest of the lyric.
Armor on.....defend!..... my wings are fragile
I guess it would be something like
with my armour on
protect my fragile wings
and defend me from
the darkest things
then you could rhyme something with on
and wings
the above is just an example
hope that helps
Human Robot
They're is a word used in place of they are and is pronounced thay-ah.
Human Robot